33. Imagine someone you know is taking this course and has decided to write about you. Write their piece for them!
Michala is full of piss and vinegar! She is high on life, and is always looking for an adventure. She hates to work, but loves to play. Michala is hyper, bold, and very boisterous. She lets people know what is on her mind, and usually never holds back. Michala is athletic, I met her playing basketball as a matter of fact, and she is very competitive. Michala drives me crazy, but at the same time I can't stand to be away from her. Her strong personality may rub off the wrong way, but she has a soft heart, and a caring attitude. She doesn't let the stresses of life bring her down, and she is always willing to lend a helping hand. Her caring attitude draws people in, and her big heart keeps them around. She is always willing to help, and she is great with kids.
If my boyfriend Matt was writing this piece, I think this what he would say....At least this is what I hope he would :)
Looking for a rewrite--for the same reasons I want a rewrite of the piece about Matt: a million places where your reader deserves examples and specifics and you just dodge doing that. You need to find a couple of things you really want to say and say them with some depth--not say a lot of things but none of them in a way we can remember.
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